PLEASE can I have some honest opinions on this piece of writing?
This is exactly a little excerpt I wrote from out of nowhere. Please tell what you think and anything I could add, diminish, and constructive criticism is welcome. I know it's long but I Deep down appreciate this! THANKS
As he double doors
Being rightful, i'd say that is the work of an amateur. not to be rude! but it needs more work, a lot more business. people when writing, like when drawing. they don't notice all the seldom details in how it was described. pay attention to it, and remember
To add to the Aristotelianism entelechy of dress 
To all but the most attitude-minded persons, the dress pant sweatpants look exactly like a pair of gray wool trousers unabated with pockets, belt loops, and even a zippered fly. But instead of being scratchy and uncomfortable, they feel like your
